Monday, June 13, 2005

When Small



You're sleeping
next to me

closing your fists
like a baby

holding
the night

as silence deepens
like a howl of the eye


2 comments:

Pris said...

hi jill
what if you changed the ing verbs to straight present tense? makes it more immediate for me. (no, i'm not the gerund cop and use them all the time:-)

Jill said...

thanks pris. i'll take your suggestion.