Tuesday, August 15, 2006

Just yourself thinking about me

Look at your formatting.
Demeter is not appalled by this.
Demeter knows.

                                   I talked to her in the car
                             about her sister. I sat in the car
                                   at the top of the hill

in the police cruiser.       I said       (her daughter)

                                   I said that we were lucky
                             to be thinking about the same thing--
                                   that was rare.

And the moon the same moon.
I asked, whether she had parted ways
with her garden, or not.

*

I sat in her garden.
I said, I know.

                                   the picture will hold you up
                                   the picture will arrest you
                                   you will not be able to forget
                                   the picture
                                   the picture will argue with you
                                   from the wall

*

She had no talent for miracles
she said
(just for the mirror)

                               I said       that was a lie

I was a musician
I said

*

try music.

now Two things:

Thieves
in the New American Gothic
have a tight grip on the handle

and the woman, she
isn’t smiling.

*

What do the others know about me?

6 comments:

derek said...

yes / i like how bracketed words can slot into a poem like recurring thought, speech & thought colliding, one trying to keep ahead of the other

RC said...

Thieves
in the New American Gothic
have a tight grip on the handle

that's my favorite image.

AnnMarie Eldon said...

she said  
               (just for the mirror)
          I've bloody missed your poetry

Lee Herrick said...

I like this very much...love the first line & the last few stanzas.

David said...

Thanks everyone. Appreciate the feedback.

Guess I should get out more often.

--D

666poetry-finchnot said...

love this poem david

the formatting really makes it
work / provides a disjointed ness
to it / /


thanx for the brilliant writing / /
much enjoyed

~jennx