tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13358346.post114800706719793104..comments2023-10-10T11:56:24.878-05:00Comments on cafe' cafe': Poem in Your VoiceAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08195202743154382432noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13358346.post-1150339457479364282006-06-14T21:44:00.000-05:002006-06-14T21:44:00.000-05:00david, rc, j.b., luc, michael, jill, lyle, and lee...david, rc, j.b., luc, michael, jill, lyle, and lee:<BR/><BR/>thank you all so much. this was my first here so your comments also served to make me feel comfortable and very welcomed. <BR/><BR/>j.b., i looove the idea of "explodes" - 'can't imagine a bigger compliment, and lyle, thanks for the thorough read.<BR/><BR/>again, thank you so much.Sara Kearnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10009406545077045857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13358346.post-1149232257083739562006-06-02T02:10:00.000-05:002006-06-02T02:10:00.000-05:00I like this a lot.I like this a lot.Lee Herrickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13989557906560291595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13358346.post-1148348211666041152006-05-22T20:36:00.000-05:002006-05-22T20:36:00.000-05:00I like how the poem insists on its voice, insists ...I like how the poem insists on its voice, insists on keeping an innocent touch on the world. I like it that the poem takes the chance of saying things that might be considered frivolous or trivial from a "serious" conservative literary standpoint.<BR/><BR/>"I will be<BR/>finally alive<BR/>in all your ticklish spots<BR/>and occasional freckles.<BR/><BR/>And you will become a little more of a man,<BR/>and I will parade my new girlishness,<BR/>tra-la-la"<BR/><BR/>"I'll be off to find the tenth planet<BR/>with its rivers and rings."<BR/><BR/>And then punctuated with the more intense passionate moments:<BR/><BR/>"...we will both become newborns,/all red and screaming,/covered with milk and wonder.<BR/><BR/>And we will suckle at the sky,<BR/>and suck the ocean air until we're salty and blue..."<BR/><BR/>I love how the poem insists on the value of its innocence.<BR/><BR/>I really liked the poem.Lyle Daggetthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10731915540520704368noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13358346.post-1148279367440167652006-05-22T01:29:00.000-05:002006-05-22T01:29:00.000-05:00yay to this poem.yay to this poem.JChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08572294700043080025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13358346.post-1148179989679374792006-05-20T21:53:00.000-05:002006-05-20T21:53:00.000-05:00ah la laah la laluc u!https://www.blogger.com/profile/02654294445124259346noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13358346.post-1148125235206910852006-05-20T06:40:00.000-05:002006-05-20T06:40:00.000-05:00This poem explodes, I esp. like tra-la-la!:)This poem explodes, I esp. like tra-la-la!<BR/>:)J.B. Rowellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13960158058286478956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13358346.post-1148090797059525102006-05-19T21:06:00.000-05:002006-05-19T21:06:00.000-05:00Yes,it's a good little love poem.Yes,it's a good little love poem.RChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14678775084337683859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-13358346.post-1148089696866545982006-05-19T20:48:00.000-05:002006-05-19T20:48:00.000-05:00hey, i enjoyed this. when i first started reading ...hey, i enjoyed this. when i first started reading it i began to go, oh no, not another love poem. but then it got interesting. i especially like the last two strophes. <BR/><BR/>--DDavidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01901598815872779086noreply@blogger.com